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risa ([personal profile] hyojungss) wrote in [community profile] 17hols 2022-02-20 01:12 am (UTC)

Re: [FILL] Behind your eyelids

this piece is so interesting! i love the style you used, like the jump to seemingly unrelated chalkboard -> relevant exposition. the narration is very wonwoo... wonwoo being an absolute worrywart overthinker asldkfjlds. i guess what you'd call sparsity in that you never directly Say Things to the reader but everything 'coming together' to contextualize the idea you're trying to communicate.

a few fav lines:
- Wonwoo hates having to explain himself to people, but especially to Junhui. “There are so many things.”
- Junhui only slows down when he’s afraid of hurting something. When he realizes his own potential for cruelty.
- “I can’t do what you do.” / Junhui lets him deflect. “What do I do?”

and i think my favorite part of how you've written wh here is that junhui exists to challenge wonwoo on those ideals of his which are giving him such a hard time. wonwoo's implicit 'things should be fair' and junhui's explicit 'what if i don't care?' it's such a breath of fresh air sort of contrast between them that makes their relationship so interesting. and i think why ww hates explaining himself to jun is just that jun is so good at unraveling those knots once they're not trapped in wonwoo's head, reminding him that not everything matters as much as he thinks about them. jww you classic intp! but i also love the arc about nostalgia, confusing your feelings for someone with your feelings for what you associate them with. thank you for writing ♡

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