cat this was amazing.. this is something that i’m going to think about for a really long time thank you… ur prose (and characterization) is so gorgeous and artfully wielded, u have this way of touching upon emotions and feelings that aren’t easy to name but u capture just. so so well. i admire ur writing and love the way u look at the world. there’s this overwhelming feeling of aloneness and smallness but at the same time, throughout it all there is perf unit and junhui to catch minghao TT just in the periphery… and all of it was wonderful thank u … plus the references to the ocean, minghao saying sorry to say sorry for thoughts he can only internalize — i felt alone but together, with him, also, just staring out into the ocean and watching it stare back
some of my favorite lines:
He doesn’t know how long he stands like that, still and silent in the dark, letting the roar of the water tune out everything else. When he comes to the lights are on and Junhui’s hands are over his, guiding him to twist the faucet handle. The silence echoes in the empty space the water leaves. GAH this entire scene was entirely too visceral and u can hear the silence and the jagged edges it leaves (also i loved that part later, how everything seems to slide off chan but it catches, always catches on Minghao).
He thinks about how he planned everything out so perfectly last year, all the pieces cut to fit neatly into place only to be ruined by Minghao himself. He thinks about how he felt looking down at the ocean, beautiful and dangerous and strange. The way it made panic rise in his chest. i rly like how u reveal things about what the characters thinking and feeling without being obvious/explicit about it and i feel like it resembles the true nature of our feelings, how sometimes they’re hard to put a name to but its infinitely easier to reference it in past experiences
Re: [FILL] more land than water
some of my favorite lines:
He doesn’t know how long he stands like that, still and silent in the dark, letting the roar of the water tune out everything else. When he comes to the lights are on and Junhui’s hands are over his, guiding him to twist the faucet handle. The silence echoes in the empty space the water leaves. GAH this entire scene was entirely too visceral and u can hear the silence and the jagged edges it leaves (also i loved that part later, how everything seems to slide off chan but it catches, always catches on Minghao).
He thinks about how he planned everything out so perfectly last year, all the pieces cut to fit neatly into place only to be ruined by Minghao himself. He thinks about how he felt looking down at the ocean, beautiful and dangerous and strange. The way it made panic rise in his chest. i rly like how u reveal things about what the characters thinking and feeling without being obvious/explicit about it and i feel like it resembles the true nature of our feelings, how sometimes they’re hard to put a name to but its infinitely easier to reference it in past experiences