i am thinking and thinking about how to say it but i don't know. your writing is REALLY GOOD... it just hits the right notes and for the right amount of time. i can't analyze what it is about it so in fact i think you need to write more so that i can do so!! but here - the visual imagery of mingyu the outsider looking in on this conversation from an opposing balcony is so striking and beautiful. "Mingyu had kept count until the numbers ticked into the double digits and he felt like he could afford to stop putting an expiration date on their arrangement." is so SAD because, well. the false hope. "He could write a whole stack of books about all the people with whom he’d waded in too deep, how he’d still been surprised when everyone tore free and tried to swim back." and "If nothing else, he was at least consistent." (ok one (1) of the things you're really good at is the visual analogies they're just so vivid and match so well with the emotion you're trying to convey.) "I think I'm done, are you?" / "Not yet." and ww going inside first, the double meaning of it all. well i really think this was excellently devastating so tyvm :_)
Re: [FILL] in your wake
i am thinking and thinking about how to say it but i don't know. your writing is REALLY GOOD... it just hits the right notes and for the right amount of time. i can't analyze what it is about it so in fact i think you need to write more so that i can do so!! but here - the visual imagery of mingyu the outsider looking in on this conversation from an opposing balcony is so striking and beautiful. "Mingyu had kept count until the numbers ticked into the double digits and he felt like he could afford to stop putting an expiration date on their arrangement." is so SAD because, well. the false hope. "He could write a whole stack of books about all the people with whom he’d waded in too deep, how he’d still been surprised when everyone tore free and tried to swim back." and "If nothing else, he was at least consistent." (ok one (1) of the things you're really good at is the visual analogies they're just so vivid and match so well with the emotion you're trying to convey.) "I think I'm done, are you?" / "Not yet." and ww going inside first, the double meaning of it all. well i really think this was excellently devastating so tyvm :_)