HELLO!!!!!! i was delighted to see this in my inbox before i read it and became promptly devastated!! jeonghan pov is always such a sucker punch because of the clarity with which he understands the people around him + his self sacrificing nature and in this au it’s just too potent…. well also i guess i created the miserable source material in question so i’m to blame too…. but oh my god!!!!
well first the structural elegance of this fill, the parallelism! i think you are so strong at these kinds of big picture questions of structure/form (i want to use the language of composition/value/shape design as an artist) and i love how you set up the contrast between what is expected of jeonghan and what he himself wants. i love how jeonghan’s thoughts go from this is my friend > i suppose we could be friends regarding seungcheol, and the almost counterintuitive phrasing there is really effective in illustrating how even as a child he’s painfully aware of the slippage between expectations vs reality – but also the gulf between them.
you do a great job of drawing out the irony in that respect: jeonghan sees himself as easy to love, which is why seungcheol loves him; he's exactly what everyone expects and needs him to be. so not only is it unexpected that jeonghan comes to love jisoo, in terms of the expectations surrounding his social class/position as academy noble, but it's a breath of fresh air to find someone immune to his charm and opaque to his understanding! someone whose love and companionship he has to work for and even then never fully attain. and then, jeonghan’s realization at the end is suchhhh a great counterpoint to the first one: the lazy sunlight of his companionship with jisoo vs. seungcheol's inconsolably bright adoration.
and i SO love that you leaned into jeonghan as spymaster too and used that to sketch out some of the other seventeenies’ roles in this world. yes unwilling heir jww! new money alliance commoner ksy! obsessed with whatever is going on with gyujunhao here and the fishing competition!! i'm so looking forward to ur full writeup of fe3hteen profiles ^_^ thank u so much for remixing hwa, it's truly a gift to play in the space with u
Re: [REMIX] my will across the sky in stars
well first the structural elegance of this fill, the parallelism! i think you are so strong at these kinds of big picture questions of structure/form (i want to use the language of composition/value/shape design as an artist) and i love how you set up the contrast between what is expected of jeonghan and what he himself wants. i love how jeonghan’s thoughts go from this is my friend > i suppose we could be friends regarding seungcheol, and the almost counterintuitive phrasing there is really effective in illustrating how even as a child he’s painfully aware of the slippage between expectations vs reality – but also the gulf between them.
you do a great job of drawing out the irony in that respect: jeonghan sees himself as easy to love, which is why seungcheol loves him; he's exactly what everyone expects and needs him to be. so not only is it unexpected that jeonghan comes to love jisoo, in terms of the expectations surrounding his social class/position as academy noble, but it's a breath of fresh air to find someone immune to his charm and opaque to his understanding! someone whose love and companionship he has to work for and even then never fully attain. and then, jeonghan’s realization at the end is suchhhh a great counterpoint to the first one: the lazy sunlight of his companionship with jisoo vs. seungcheol's inconsolably bright adoration.
and i SO love that you leaned into jeonghan as spymaster too and used that to sketch out some of the other seventeenies’ roles in this world. yes unwilling heir jww! new money alliance commoner ksy! obsessed with whatever is going on with gyujunhao here and the fishing competition!! i'm so looking forward to ur full writeup of fe3hteen profiles ^_^ thank u so much for remixing hwa, it's truly a gift to play in the space with u